A Blueprint for Our Story: The Rework

     So, previously in one of my post I talked about my storyboard and the general idea of what me and my group are going to do. However, we decided as a group to rework certain things, like the interaction between Asher and Austin, as well as, the second scene that shows Asher several days before the incident.

Original

    Here I want to compare our previous storyboard to the newly made one. On this first page of the original storyboard we have don't really have an establishing shot that gives us an idea of where these characters are at. It also gives in to a very cliche interaction between Asher and Austin, which doesn't really introduce us to who both of these characters are. Another thing is the lack of detail between different shots that does not help develop these two characters. 

    Because of these issues, we decided in adding an establishing shot in order to give the audience context on where our characters are located. Another thing we change compared to before was to make Asher sit down and do work instead of walking, so the scene feels more believable, where as Asher just walking around doing work would seem unrealistic even for someone as smart as him. Then, we thought about how Austin would interact with Asher by thinking of a way to avoid Austin bumping into Asher; this is where we thought that since Asher is already doing their work Austin should sneak up on him and talk a little bit and then attempt to take away Ashers work. 

Rework

    Now, for the second page of the storyboard is where Asher gets to his tipping point and decides to kill Austin with his pencil. Not much changed for this part except, honestly, the how Austin provokes Asher, since we felt it was pretty tame beforehand. Also, we felt that there was not much attention to the weapon in the first storyboard as in the second we focused more it. Something that our group got suggested to do, which we thought was great, was to add a shot where Asher is sharpening the pencil in order to have the best shot at killing Austin and to develop Asher's messed up character.

Original

Rework

    For our third page of the storyboard, this is where things start to become a bit more developed compared to before. In the original we cut to a black screen that comes in place as Austin gets killed. Then shot cuts to the evil eyes of Asher that are followed up into a match cut to Asher's eyes but several days prior to the incident, which pretty much sums up the page. 

Original

    In the reworked version we show Asher jumping towards Austin, into the black screen which is also the title card, into a medium shot of Asher's back facing the floor, to a shot of Asher's bloody pencil, which then finally cuts into the shot with Asher's eyes to the match cut. Overall, I feel that this creates a bit more understanding for us as a production team and also it develops more meaning into the story for the audience. 

    

Rework

    In addition to all of the different things we changed, we also added the second scene of the film that wasn't even started in the original storyboard. In this scene we begin with the eyes of Asher from the match cut, which then zooms out of his eyes into a tracking shot of Asher walking into his house, to his room. This scene is meant to work as a look into Asher's personal life, that describes a little bit more on who he is and what his environment feels life. It always works as a great way to continue the film since the end of this scene is concluded by entering Asher's room where there is a computer that has very important information regarding the story.